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Previous rewrite used 'she was terrified', 'it was anticipatory grief', 'he was resigned' as explicit emotion anchors. Training showed 6 of the 7 concepts still cluster together at cosines 0.52-0.71 — because the 'she was [emotion]' pattern is a shared stylistic feature distinct from the rest of the corpus, which conveys emotion implicitly through phenomenology. Rewrite without the anchor. State conveyed through action and body: 'her body locked down', 'his mind had stopped reaching', 'the loss hadn't come yet but she was already inside it'. Matches the corpus style of existing stories like sunday_afternoon/content which says 'nothing she wanted right now, nothing missing' not 'she was content'. Accept some loss of PCA signal strength in exchange for the concepts living in their semantically correct neighborhoods rather than forming a stylistic island.
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She'd been sitting with the notebook open, music playing, ideas branching off each other. One thought sparked another, which sparked two more; they just seemed to appear and flow.
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He'd been working on the canvas for hours, one color suggesting the next, a shape on the left asking for an echo on the right. The painting was telling him what it wanted. His hands kept moving ahead of his thinking.
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She'd been in the kitchen since noon, pulling things out of the fridge, one ingredient suggesting the next. The dish wasn't planned; it was emerging. She tasted and added and tasted again; it was going somewhere.
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