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Previous rewrite used 'she was terrified', 'it was anticipatory grief', 'he was resigned' as explicit emotion anchors. Training showed 6 of the 7 concepts still cluster together at cosines 0.52-0.71 — because the 'she was [emotion]' pattern is a shared stylistic feature distinct from the rest of the corpus, which conveys emotion implicitly through phenomenology. Rewrite without the anchor. State conveyed through action and body: 'her body locked down', 'his mind had stopped reaching', 'the loss hadn't come yet but she was already inside it'. Matches the corpus style of existing stories like sunday_afternoon/content which says 'nothing she wanted right now, nothing missing' not 'she was content'. Accept some loss of PCA signal strength in exchange for the concepts living in their semantically correct neighborhoods rather than forming a stylistic island.
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He'd been working through the symptoms for an hour, steady and methodically making progress, eliminating one possibility after another. The answer wasn't in view yet, but it was close. He kept asking the next question.
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She'd been going through the witness statements, steady and methodically, looking for the inconsistency. The four of them all described the same drive in slightly different orders. One had gotten the sequence wrong. She didn't know yet which one, but she was going to.
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He'd been piecing together his brother's behavior over months — the missed calls, the abrupt move, the strange money — steady and methodically. The picture wasn't complete, but the shape of it was forming. He kept following the thread.
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